Six Sentence Sunday #23

Last week was so much fun. Loved reading responses to the six sentences–interesting how words out of context can have a completely different meaning than what’s intended. However, the feedback made me reevaluate Adam’s role in Swashbuckler (my WIP). As a result, I think he’ll be a richer character than I first wrote him. Thank you!

We start where we left off last week with Rachel and Adam on an ocean beach.

He had taken a jog down the beach–his hands were on his hips, and he was breathing heavily.

“Not since I was twelve,” she answered, smiling up at him.

He plopped down beside her and began sifting sand through his hands onto his legs.  They sat in silence, Rachel watching the surf. There were little white birds, dancing in unison down the beach, in and out of the waves. As they got closer she heard them, just over the sounds of the surf, making little burring noises, almost like a cat purring.

Here’s the link for prior week’s snippets from Swashbuckler, my WIP.
PLEASE go visit the other talented writers participating in Six Sentence Sunday!

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18 thoughts on “Six Sentence Sunday #23

  1. Great description of the beach! I would really love to be there right now. It would be so much better than this frigid 30 degree weather we are having. Great six! Have a great day! 🙂

  2. Ah, you put me right there on the beach. And the birds are a perfect touch — gave motion to the scene even though the characters are still. Nice six!

  3. I like Adam. Who is Adam?? “Enquiring minds want to know!” I like the feel of this scene. Quiet but there seems to be a lot going on under the surface. Great six, Karysa!

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