Predator Vs. Prey Six Sunday Snippet

I’m giving Swashbuckler a well-deserved break. This week comes from my 2010 NanoWrimo project, a paranormal romance featuring reincarnation, magic, ancient entities and betrayal. Oh yeah, and love.

She was going to die. She saw it in his face; in his eyes. Fury and frustration, brows contorted together in an aggressive line of thick, black hair. Angry, red blotches spread from his neck, infecting his cheeks and forehead and ears. Siobhan took a small, very slow step back from him. Wasn’t sudden movement a trigger for the predator to go in for the kill?

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19 thoughts on “Predator Vs. Prey Six Sunday Snippet

  1. Eep! She has my name! RUN! πŸ˜€

    One question: The man you’re describing, is he the love interest? I ask because this description: “an aggressive line of thick, black hair” and “Angry, red blotches spread from his neck, infecting his cheeks and forehead and ears” are not complimentary and make me think he’s overly hirsute, and is suffering from some sort of disease that make his skin have different colors.

    You definitely painted fury, well, though. πŸ™‚

  2. I love all this description; you’re painting a very vivid picture here. One question, tho; assuming this is a fight-or-flight moment, would she have the time to notice all this?

    • That’s a great point, Monica and honestly, I don’t know for sure that she would notice these things. The conundrum of painting a scene, denoting tension with mere words!

      In her favor, she knows the attacker (a student of hers) and she can’t escape the confrontation for reasons that will be revealed. As Sue Ann noted, I did feel that this was a moment when time slowed down.

  3. What a great scene, Karysa! The way you describe (I assume) the hero’s expression, his visceral response as perceived by the heroine is exceptional. I love the choice of words you use. Excellent, excellent. Great six. πŸ™‚

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